First Draft Feedback

After handing in our first draft on the 22nd November, which had been completed the day before. We received both a grade and constructive feedback to improve the grade.However, we also got a piece of constructive criticism stating that we needed something else running throughout the video, for example a storyline which keeps being jumped back to. Due to our video becoming very repetitive switching between the artist being alone, then with a guitar and then at a different location. Therefore, we believe that we should get a female performer, and create a storyline around the artist losing the girl, and wanting her to "come home" relating the story line. This storyline may be around 1-1:30 minutes long and it is played periodically thorough the music video, and the spaces around the story are filled with our favourite shots of the current draft.